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Ben Sherreard's avatar

This is brilliant. Others will be able to provide feedback on the writing, but from a story perspective, this leaves me with so many questions I want the answers to. The writing has pulled me all the way in. You’ve done a great job of creating a protagonist that I don’t necessarily like, but do root for.

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Veronika Bond's avatar

intricate layers of experience: from the inner wrestling with pain response, through relationship dynamics, to 'toddlers'-eye-view', to OBE and back, to a cliffhanger finale...

The scene you have created here feels as if Paul is walking (or rather hobbling/ dragging himself) through a hall of warped mirrors.

Can't wait to find out what happens next!

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